Last year my friend James Kendley posted a terrific article on The Blood-Red Pencil blog on five uses for your unpublished novel. I liked it so much I asked him for permission to repost it for my readers. He was gracious enough to say yes. Kendley is a member of the Horror Writers Association from Charlottesville, VA. Visit him at http://kendley.com. He is also a fellow member of the Virginia Writers Club.
My first
novel, The Wine Ghost, was
lollygagging on my hard drive for almost three years before I put it back to
work.
It had already
done a lot for me. The Wine Ghost was
twelve years in the making. I wrote more than 350,000 words on three continents
to get 110,000 in the final draft, and I learned lessons in writing that no
classroom can contain. The novel is so dense, challenging, and chaotic that
it's unpublishable in its present form, but writers who've read the whole thing
(and the handful of agents who've read the substantial pitch and excerpts) have
said it's a remarkable achievement, despite the fatal flaws.
Yup. Fatal.
The first
half of the novel is a spiritual nosedive, and thirty pages into it, most readers
are already wishing for the sudden stop at the bottom. The upward spiral of the
second half has stronger structure, and it’s less grim than the first, but the
pacing is crippled by chapters up to 9,500 words in length. Moreover, basic
readability is hampered by chapters ending like short stories rather than
ending in thrills, chills, or cliff-hangers that might help keep readers
turning those pages.
Worse: even
at a slim 110,000, the current version is nearly Dickensian in the number of
characters and subplots. A ridiculously overdrawn expat milieu obscures a simple tale of disgrace and redemption.
Well, what
to do with a novel like this? “Kill your darlings” comes to mind, but there’s still
good meat on those awkward bones. I’d be a fool to just delete it.
Here are
five ways to put The Wine Ghost to
work.
• plucking out whole works of short fiction
Done this. From
The Wine Ghost, I’ve harvested short
fiction (“Dry Wash” in The Bicycle Review, “Coolie
Tales” in not from here, are you?,
“The Belly Lesson” and “Tracy-baby Tells a Ghost Story” in Danse Macabre) and poetry (“The
Algerian Witch’s Abandoned Brood” in Hauptfriedhoff,
for which I also penned the foreword). This is good exposure and possibly good
advance PR, as long as I credit these appearances in my final MS.
Oh, and as
long as I eventually rewrite and sell the book.
• repurposing plot, setting, and character
Check. If The Wine Ghost is to become a viable
novel, I must cut 40,000 words of extraneous characters and subplots, and I’ll
be damned if they’re going to waste. Almost all of that 40,000 words, including
an entire valley and one of the most frightening maniacs I’ve ever written, is
going into my horror/urban fantasy series. A no-brainer, as they say.
• entering first-chapter contests
Consider
this: your first novel, like mine, may be unpublishable in its current
condition, but you polished the living daylights out of that first chapter,
didn’t you? Despite structural flaws in the work-as-a-whole, you might still
get some cash out of that first chapter. Dr. John Yeoman has put out a
straightforward, thoughtful guide on How
to Win Writing Contests for Profit.
Now you know.
• thematic analysis: the rut or the sweet
spot?
We make and break
patterns in our writing over the years. Sometimes patterns emerge because we’re
caught in the loop of trying and failing to get it right, and sometimes such
patterns remain because we got it right the first time and it works so damned
well. Because we’re swinging for the fences and
bursting with things to say, our first novels are perfect for spotting the
beginnings of larger thematic patterns in our writing.
The Wine Ghost is no exception. My old friend, developmental editor Zak Johnson, says this: “I think you've mined your Wine Ghost for more than you even realize. (the evil uncle from “Dry Wash”) has reappeared as the obscene old man in many of your works … if you do (rewrite The Wine Ghost as a commercially viable novel), keep the original as a relic of the exorcism that brought it out of you.”
The Wine Ghost is no exception. My old friend, developmental editor Zak Johnson, says this: “I think you've mined your Wine Ghost for more than you even realize. (the evil uncle from “Dry Wash”) has reappeared as the obscene old man in many of your works … if you do (rewrite The Wine Ghost as a commercially viable novel), keep the original as a relic of the exorcism that brought it out of you.”
Or as a
standalone shrine to my daddy issues. Enough said there.
A re-read of
that novel may show you patterns to build upon or abandon. Don’t just write it
all off as juvenilia.
• just one more draft, I promise
After 30
years as a professional writer and editor, I put The Wine Ghost aside and started submitting fiction in 2009. I have
a completed and competitive genre novel making the rounds of publishers, and
I’m halfway done with the sequel. I can’t drop that to start draft five of The Drowning God, especially knowing
that it would take a sixth and seventh draft to get this beast on its feet.
But I’m not
giving up the idea. The lazy monster on my hard drive is an important book, the
book that called me to write it because it may speak to some teenager as
confused and depressed as I was when I first got a little relief by reading
Samuel R. Delaney’s Dhalgren or Lord
Dunsany’s Pegana tales. It may show some kid a path out of darkness.
So I keep honing
my craft in order to do the story justice. Every genre chapter I write, every
blog post I submit, every short story that goes over some indifferent editor’s
transom — it’s all training to deal with The
Wine Ghost.
I’m lifting
weights here, people. If I can get that novel to do a little work in the
meantime, we’ll both be in better shape when I get back to it.
Thanks, Kendley, for laying this out in such a clean manner. I too have a 350,000-word manuscript lying in cyberdust. I wonder what I can mine from it. Believe me, you are an inspiration. I will be doing a lot of digging over the next few months...
Thanks, Kendley, for laying this out in such a clean manner. I too have a 350,000-word manuscript lying in cyberdust. I wonder what I can mine from it. Believe me, you are an inspiration. I will be doing a lot of digging over the next few months...
Yes, I have a full novel and some other pieces that I may dust off one day. The Wine Ghost is an intruging title. Maybe it's just because I like wine :-)
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You know, sometimes we find an old pair of shoes in the back of the closet and when we slip them on we wonder why we dicarded them in the first place.
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Thanks for having me here, Betsy!
ReplyDeleteWonderful, thought-provoking post. I have several novels on my hard-drive and a food memoir. I think most about a historical romance that I wrote and loved...one of these day!
ReplyDeleteThat's great advice! And I'm a fan of the BRP too. (Indeed, I was a team blogger there till recently.) Everything can be recycled, and I love the idea of recasting chapters as stand-alone short stories. Often, a chapter will end with a page hanger - a natural close. We just have to restructure the narrative so the context is transparent and the story is self-contained.
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